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PostSubject: SR Writings.   Sat Oct 02, 2010 10:25 pm

This is where I post SR-Stuff.

Please give me lots of feed back.

Tori sat there for sometime,barely listening to his Teacher's latest lechure
he was put back into reality by Jack Kursupi,an student vertical from him who had
a strange urge to tap wildly on his desk,he had medium brown hair,green eyes he
had a fairley,almost over-done,tan and assumingly
he is of Greek Ethnicy since his last name is Greek and apprently means 'Watermelon',
that is if the translater was correct. He immeditaly turned his head to Tori
and told him something along the lines of "Hey,pay attention." This annoyed Tori
but did it anyways,luckily he paid attention since only a few minutes latter,
his teacher gave out an assignment,Tori grudgily went to work on it,
still intrested in that strange red jar he had previousley seen.
He thought of it only for his train of though being ruined by,Glimmer
the snooty star-student of his grade,she had blonde hair,blue eyes (They seemed to be dyed.)
lots of unessisary make-up,shiney white clothes and this absolutely idiotic smile
on her face,though,she is popluor,what can you expect? She sat up in the front of
the class,right next to the teacher's desk. Alot of people hate her,even other
poplour students,she is annoying. The class only lasted a few more minutes
and Tori and Zoui were exitied to see the strange red jar,but as you know
this probably will never happen.
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PostSubject: Re: SR Writings.   Sat Oct 02, 2010 10:32 pm

Sounds good so far.
Is this an excerpt from Chapter 1?
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PostSubject: Re: SR Writings.   Sat Oct 02, 2010 10:33 pm

Thank you.
No,chapter...uhhh...I have no idea. But is not chapter 1 or 2...
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PostSubject: Re: SR Writings.   Sat Oct 02, 2010 10:35 pm

Your welcome.

Oh, OK.

I like it ^-^
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PostSubject: Re: SR Writings.   Sat Oct 02, 2010 10:48 pm

Thank you agian.
I do too,I have another I want to test as well...
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PostSubject: Re: SR Writings.   Sun Oct 03, 2010 4:27 pm

Oh cool, can't wait to read it! ^_^
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PostSubject: Re: SR Writings.   Fri Oct 08, 2010 9:38 pm

Yup,I'm not to sure about this chapter.


Kallen immeitally shot a look at Tori,the kind that Mothers give to their young children after they ate a cookie out of the cookie jar,She was preparing for her friends.
Though,Tori is no where near a young child,though the rest of their Class
Kallen was known for taking things far too seriousley,and most people labeled her as 'Insane' prehaps even Zoui,Lenz ansd even Tori did as well.
She was angered easily,she also had this strange tendasy for tipping a desk or chair right on your face. Heres an example for you!

A mere minutes after the stare ended Kallen had got up and tried to tip tori's desk
when the Teacher,then turned aeround. And intrestingly enough a Teacher became his life line. Kallen managed to sit down just in time to not get in any serious form of trouble
but the vast majority of class,save for those idiots that refuse to listen to the person trying to help them in life. Yet Tori contiuned to sit there,barely listening,crutched in between his desk and the white brick wall.
He almost fell down when Ziou came rushing though the door,with Lenz and Luna in grasp. The fit Made Tori and Kallen burst out in laughter,though Ms.Fran was far too busy carrying out Ziou,Luna and Lenz though the door.
Tori 'Finally' Stopped laughing,Kallen countinued snickering,Tori then bagan Writeing something on a piece of paper,when he saw a shadow out of his right eye,
which made him fall out of his chair,luckily he didn't hit his head on the desk only a few steps away.




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PostSubject: Re: SR Writings.   Sat Oct 09, 2010 6:48 pm

I like it . . . . though it didn't make all that much sense =/
It didn't flow very well, if you get what I mean.
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PostSubject: Re: SR Writings.   Sat Oct 09, 2010 6:56 pm

Oh,O.K Thanks,I'll work on that.
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PostSubject: Re: SR Writings.   Sun Oct 10, 2010 11:01 pm

Mmm-hmm ^_^

I kinda need to work on that too . . .
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PostSubject: Re: SR Writings.   Tue Oct 12, 2010 4:54 pm

Yuppers,you do...
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